tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13911862.post4893539902001270732..comments2023-12-15T08:48:28.098-05:00Comments on Once in a Blue Muse: Would you read this book?Lisa Cohenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07530826748768737972noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13911862.post-74286073145951367242008-05-29T10:41:00.000-04:002008-05-29T10:41:00.000-04:00back again... i still feel i would be so much more...back again... i still feel i would be so much more drawn to the story if the "human" aspect of their journey was highlighted,, and i had to wait till i read the book to find out all the other worldly things... but you know that is just my opinion... i just loved the way you described it in todays post,, all character and no setting,, it drew me in,,paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13911862.post-43094569483621678962008-05-09T11:28:00.000-04:002008-05-09T11:28:00.000-04:00Overall I really like the premise presented, but t...Overall I really like the premise presented, but the pitch itself is hard to get through on a first read because the sentences are very choppy in the first two paragraphs. I'd suggest combining the second and third sentences in the second paragraph to give it a better overall flow.<BR/><BR/>That aside, if this were the blurb on the back of a book, I think I'd be interested enough in the plot and characters to read the first page.<BR/><BR/>Good luck with this :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13911862.post-21353142225576994962008-05-02T13:30:00.000-04:002008-05-02T13:30:00.000-04:00Paisley--I very much appreciate your honesty. I p...Paisley--I very much appreciate your honesty. I probably should have indicated that this *is* a fantasy novel with romance elements.<BR/><BR/>My 12 yo son (who I won't let read the manuscript due to theme and story elements that I don't think are appropriate for him) read the pitch and said he'd read it because I wrote it, but not because he thought it was very interesting. LOL. You want brutal honesty, ask a 12 year old.<BR/><BR/>As this was a first pass, I will likely revisit it as my understanding of writing these kind of pitches grows.<BR/><BR/>Thank you, again.<BR/><BR/>best,<BR/>lisaLisa Cohenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07530826748768737972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13911862.post-46629098977261179232008-05-02T13:22:00.000-04:002008-05-02T13:22:00.000-04:00i cannot say i would,, as i am put off immediately...i cannot say i would,, as i am put off immediately by the sci fi aspect of the whole thing... but that is not to say that the book itself will not be well written or the story line perfectly unraveled... if i cant see it in my minds eye,, i cannot read it,, nor watch it on a movie... but that is just me... <BR/><BR/>give me trevor and the boys,, and i am there....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.com